fix a six page english paper

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Yt6y5CXsUZVmA7iWL_x2icEkA4_GYp-wrsJ1dHQvdmg/edit?ts=5e97142b&pli=1

here is the instructions

  1. Introduce more sources—there are link to the sources in the comments
  2. Edit the last paragraph
  3. some tenses and sentence in the essay may be awkward
  4. right now this essay have a lot of mistakes and bad sentences, turn this into a good paper with good idea, structure, and grammar.